[合集] Joyce的微型短篇*之一(09.08.05更新完结)

本帖最后由 joycechen1985 于 2009-8-7 23:51 编辑

本来只是客座性质的偶尔练手,结果一写便上了隐,再加上论坛里各位亲们给予的鼓励,给了我坚持写下去的动力,于是决定把从前写的各个独立的小段整合在一起,虽然每篇独立成章,但有着内在联系。新手上路,水平、质量尚待提高,请大家多支持哦~:s18


chapter one:goodbye,my love

Scene:the Pittsburgh airport

Justin was going to board the aeroplane which was to N.Y.  
  

Justin(passport and air ticket in his hand): we don't need any commitment to prove our love, right?

(低着头,片刻无语,突然抬头,凝视着brian)

Justin:I’ll be back,I promise.

              The memorise will belong to us in common,forever.



Justin(上前抱住Brian,在耳边轻轻说):Keep in touch with me,ok?

  
During going forward to the entrance, suddenly Justin turned around and shout aloud.

Justin:Brian!(一时哽咽)

        I—— LOVE——YOU!

Brian一怔,之后微微扯动一下嘴角,神色平静,看不出是喜是悲

Brian:Hey——remember that?

          ——no excuses.no apologies.no regrets.
  
Brian(深深地望着Justin):go,and find your way,sunshine!

Brian露出一抹略带苦涩的含蓄笑容,Justin眼眶微微湿润,伫立在原地

Justin(望着brian挥动的手,默默地):goodbye Pittsburgh.

                                      goodbye——my love.
life is a journey.
sometimes up,sometimes down.
keep moving on,my friends.

回复 36# bigbeans

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I want to be beautiful for you one more time.

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楼主牛人,占位慢看!:s47

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不错不错

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期待坛子里多些英文原创~

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回帖支持

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還ok.繼續加油

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28# cora
有感而发而已    season5结局总让我感到遗憾,即使知道生活中本就有太多“错过”,但是人嘛,总会期待着唯美的圆满,编剧们不给的幸福,我给他们,也满足自己的小小愿望:s13   
PS:goodbye my love里面的短篇我校对过了,统一了时态,订正了一些小错误,so请cora把那个放到《Joyce的微型短篇*之一》之前好吗?谢~呵
life is a journey.
sometimes up,sometimes down.
keep moving on,my friends.

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love is the happy ending
好喜欢这句话!! 简单而有力{:3_204:}

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用里把Justin重新压回身下----用力...

LZ
休息是应该滴
不过{:3_246:}
别休息太久啦

轮家还等着您的新文呢....

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最终回更新喽!

本帖最后由 joycechen1985 于 2009-8-7 23:59 编辑

chapter ten:tomorrow is a new day

sometimes we do not feel                 有时候,我们感受不到
like we want to feel                     我们想感受的
sometimes we do not achieve              有时候,我们达不到
what we want to achieve                  我们想达到的
sometimes things that happe              有时候,周围发生的事情
do not make sense                        毫无意义
sometimes life leads us in directions    有时候,生活把我们带向
that are beyond our control              无法控制的方向


it is at these times,most of all         就是这些时候,我们中的多数人
that we need someone                     都需要有个人
who will quietly understand us           默默地理解我们
and be there to support us               在身边支持我们
i want you to know                       我希望你知道
that i am here for you                   我就在你身边
in every way                             无论发生什么事情
and remember that though                 记住
things may be difficult now              虽然现在困难重重
tomorrow is a new day                    但明天,又是崭新的一天


                                                     ——《tomorrow is a new day》


自述(Michael):when the sun rises as usual,lives still keep going on...I know

six days ago,I wept with a broken heart in Brians's arms.(笑)damn it,I even imagine he will laugh me out as it in rest of my life.(郁闷了一会儿)ok,whatever,who care.I just know they supported me through the most difficult time of my life.But——(神秘地笑)Ben and I helped somebody too at the same time.


scene:Brian's loft   
       in the kingsize bed  11:05 P.M.

Brian(低吼一声,释放了积压已久的热情,汗湿地瘫软在Justin身上,笑着喘息):god,you have an amazing,practiced technology sunshine!
Justin(酣畅的情事过后,满足地翻个身,把Brian压在身下,笑着,手在对方胸口轻轻抚摸,暧昧地):you are still crazy and good at fuck.
Brian(自负地笑,玩弄着Justin前额的湿湿的头发):I am an expert at any time...you know it,don't you,honey?
Justin(并不打算否认,幸福地笑着,哄着孩子气的Brian,轻轻舔咬着他的耳垂):yeah,you are always the best.I really want you to stay inside me forever.
Brian(被Justin逗弄得全身骚动起来,抓住他的手,用力把Justin重新压回身下,将他的手拉至头顶上,用低哑性感的嗓音诱惑着):let's do it again and i will make you more satisfied and let you forget those guys in New York.
Justin(闻言,认真得像是许下承诺似的):nobody but you.
Brian(欲火焚身的野兽,意外听到如此真情地告白,一瞬间,为之动容,深情地睇着Justin,不知是说给自己听还是对Justin说):...you have no chance to regret sunshine...because...I won't let you go anyway...

接着满室只剩下两人交缠的旖旎风光和令人血脉喷张淫糜呻吟,甜蜜的爱意尽在不言中......

自述(Jusitn):if life is a journey surrounding love,we will be the end of each other,just as the very beginning.
                our stories started from a sex but love is our happy ending...tomorrow is a new day and we have been ready for it,new stories belong to us will begin immediately...



THE END.


PS:终于告一段落了,god,好辛苦。原来写故事真的会上瘾,之前偶尔写些随笔、散文什么的还不觉得怎样,这次玩票地续写B&J的故事,竟然连写了两周。:s22    今天发发狠,告诉自己一定要搞定ending,然后开始休息,好好工作、学习。感谢大家这些日子的关注与支持,希望最终章能让你们满意,呵~88
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  • cora

life is a journey.
sometimes up,sometimes down.
keep moving on,my friends.

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有点儿没看懂。。

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本帖最后由 joycechen1985 于 2009-8-15 17:05 编辑

chapter nine:sorry,I'm late

scene:Debbie's house       7:40 P.M.

in the living-room

Debbie(拉着Justin的手坐在沙发上,轻拍着他看似依旧稚嫩的脸颊,微笑着感慨):sunshine...look at you...oh honey...you're charming so much.

Emmtte(捏捏Justin的下巴,由衷地):sweet heart,you are like a noble prince.

Teb(拿着马克杯,呷了一口咖啡,站在一旁附和):aha~absolutly.

Justin露出了久违的羞涩笑容,亦如高中毕业舞会前大家眼中那个盛装打扮的孩子。

Hunter(认真地):if  you didn't have Brian,I would love you.

众人皆愣在原地,定格两秒后,“哈哈”配合着Hunter的冷笑话。

Lindsay(手撑着额头,头痛状,闭上眼无奈地笑,自言自语):oh~no~

Melamine(倚靠着流理台,放进嘴里一口蛋糕):so how is it going in NewYork?

Justin(笑着回应):fine,just too busy.

Melamine(胳膊顶了顶旁边的Lindsay,低声地):oh,you really should taste it.the cake is so damn delicious!

Debbie(忍不住插话,骄傲地):thanks,sweety.Vic's secret method——

大家敏感地顿时陷入沉默......

Debbie(看看大家,不自然地大笑几声,眼神中却流露出淡淡的悲伤):It doesn't matter,he likes being a focus.

Lindsay白了一眼Melamine,Melamine吐吐舌头,一脸无辜,不作声地闷头继续吃着蛋糕,味如嚼蜡。

Justin(拉着Debbie的手,看着她,惋惜地):I'm sorry for your lost.

Debbie(担忧地回头看看楼梯):thanks.Michael is more serious...

众人不约而同地看向通往Michael房间的楼梯......

Justin(眼神坚定):Trust him...Brian must can handle it.

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scene:Michael's room

Michael(坐在床上,手里翻着心爱的漫画书,含笑回忆着):the first time,we met in my comic book store.actually he looked so hot.I still remember his brown jacket,his glasses and his...(自嘲尴尬地笑笑)ass.

Brian(低着头坏坏地笑,看不出是认真还是玩笑地接茬):aha~fuck is forever.

Michael(无奈地斜睨了一眼身边双肘撑着半躺在床上的老友,不置可否地继续着自己的思绪):maybe...maybe a first sight love started from that time.

Brian(不耐烦地好像在说着老掉牙的故事似的接茬):and then you became his husband in damn Canada.(不可思议地看着Michael,皱着眉,逗弄的语气)Jesus Christ you married!

Michael(被Brian孩子气的耿耿于怀逗笑了):come on Brian,because I had grown up.I had no idea why you cared about it for a long time.

Brian(皱眉,若有所思):I didn't know ...I didn't know untill that night...Babylon's bomb night...(神经质地从鼻子里闷笑出声)fuck damn crazy.

Michael(了然地陈述着事实):Justin has been special for you from the very beginning.you were a real coward,whatever you recognize or not.

Brian陷入某种可怕地失去Justin的假设中,仿佛时间又回到了那个混乱可怕的晚上,他沉默着......

Michael(认真地问):if you lost Justin,what would you do?

Brian(想了想,放弃了继续假设):...I don't know...(松了一口气)fortunately he is alive.

Michael手中的漫画书一滑,掉在了地板上。他再也无力撑起坚强的伪装,双手掩面哭泣。

Brian(坐起身子,一把搂过Michael颤抖的身体,让他的头枕着自己的肩膀,一边亲吻着他的额头,一边抚慰着他的头发):sorry Mikey...I'm late...
life is a journey.
sometimes up,sometimes down.
keep moving on,my friends.

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Joyce好厉害啊~~突然冒出许多短篇大多出自你的手笔,都有用心看
其实短篇每次都需要新构思,长篇则是由一个构思引发的
2个都需要才思泉涌...{:3_255:}
Time Goes By 。

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21# janlam
janlam提醒得对!! 加分鼓励

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PS:“新家”的人气貌似不如从前各个短篇的呦,不晓得症结在哪儿 ,郁闷ing      怕“新篇”因此被冷落,特别在这里再发一次(虽然goodbye,my love的帖子里才是首发),希望能多点人看到,Joyce很用心在写呢~~~


我觉得是因为你更新了,而大家不知道你更新了.
可许你可以试一下,每次更新,在标题上写上更新的时间:
如:     [合集]Joyce的微型短篇集锦(090804更新)
会好点.
因为我次次来这都会留意你的文哦....
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Hunter(两手不停地摩擦着两侧的裤子口袋,眼神中透露出难言的脆弱):I just...just...don't want to be alone,thinking about...death.

Ben走了只剩Hunter一个人独自面对病魔,可以想象他的心情……

PS  Joyce可能大家只是对英文有点怕怕。如果你觉得英文写对白才有感觉,可以继续用英文写,下面再加上中文翻译,试试这样怎样?

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看见Justin的一瞬间,眼神专注且复杂,旋即又闪烁着孩子般恶作剧的表情 ---- 完全能想象Brian当时的表情!
我喜欢这类的短文,有临场感,谢谢LZ!

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本帖最后由 joycechen1985 于 2009-8-7 23:57 编辑

chapter eight:heartless asshole

scene:tomb field
During a simple farewell ceremony,everybody had been sad facing to Ben's Tombstone.
Debbie(抱住Michael,难掩担忧):are you ok,sweet heart?
Michael(安慰地拍拍Debbie的背):yeah,I'm fine...Don't worry about me,Mom.

Mel、Linds、Em、Ted and Hunter站在一旁,默默看着坚强的母子俩。  
Hunter(动情地):Ben has gone...but we are still here with you...together.
Michael、Debbie听着Hunter的话,从悲伤的情绪中恢复了一些,祖孙三代默契地深深看了看彼此,忍住眼泪回给彼此一个鼓励的眼光。

Hunter(想了想,慎重地开口):...uh...besides I have decided to transfer to Pittsburgh University.

Debbie、Michael一同看向Hunter,其它人也纷纷露出惊讶的神情。

Michael(迷惑不解):why?...you have never talked to me before.
Debbie(认真的看着Hunter):Not for us, is it? you know it is unnecessary.
Hunter(两手不停地摩擦着两侧的裤子口袋,眼神中透露出难言的脆弱):I just...just...don't want to be alone,thinking about...death.
Michael(恍然大悟,上前一下抱住Hunter,沮丧地深深自责):Oh~~~I am so sorry...
Debbie(抚慰着Hunter的手,轻声):honey,you will be alright,trust me,and welcome back home.

at the same time
Mel(与Linds窃窃私语):The fact has proved Brian is a heartless asshole.
Linds(一时语塞,无奈地耸耸肩膀,叹了口气):...
Ted(无意间听到她们的对话,眼神四处游移着想找些理由解释):...uh...mybe...I...un...I think——
Ted(瞪大眼睛,望着不远处一个英挺的身影箭步向这边走来,大声地):he's coming.

众人闻言,看向那个拎着行李袋风尘仆仆朝这边走来的人,定睛一瞧,他背后隐约有缕缕金丝迎风飘舞。

Emmtte(一脸不可思议,嘴张张合合几次之后,确定不是幻觉):...Oh,my god...



PS:“新家”的人气貌似不如从前各个短篇的呦,不晓得症结在哪儿:s36 ,郁闷ing      怕“新篇”因此被冷落,特别在这里再发一次(虽然goodbye,my love的帖子里才是首发),希望能多点人看到,Joyce很用心在写呢~~~:s09
life is a journey.
sometimes up,sometimes down.
keep moving on,my friends.

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厉害哦,加油

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突然发觉,斑竹帮我弄的“新家”没有通知过大家~~~呵
cora帮我把之前的帖子及大家跟帖的留言都放到了【原创】goodbye,my love里了哦~~~
预知故事后续发展,去那里看吧,我会尽快抽空更新的,希望大家多来支持~~~
:s08 互相转告啊!!!!!呵~
life is a journey.
sometimes up,sometimes down.
keep moving on,my friends.

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14# cora
之前那些大家的回帖也可以放进这里来吗?!如果可以,那当然好了~~~做这个新帖之前还觉得蛮可惜的,原来分散在各个帖子中的回帖没法一起贴过来呢~~~   谢谢,版主提醒,呵,而且我发现cora已经把我这个帖子分类改成了“合集”喽,再次感谢 :s14
life is a journey.
sometimes up,sometimes down.
keep moving on,my friends.

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呵呵,终于开了短篇集了~~Joyce想把之前几个帖子(还有大家的回帖)合并到这个作品集么?

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